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I don't see the grammatical error in the bolded text. There is a comma splice [wikipedia.org], though.
Remember: if the two phrases sound good alone, use a period or a semicolon!
There's no comma splice here. The final two sentences are joined by the conjuction 'and' plus a comma.
The author does show a propensity for using serial commas [wikipedia.org], though most authorities will agree that this is correct usage, if not more logical. ^_^
Nintendo Co.,Ltd. (Kyoto, JAPAN; President Satoru Iwata) announced that it will begin sales of the "Nintendo DS Lite", an upscale model of the "Nintendo DS" portable gaming system on March 2nd of this year.
The "Nintendo DS" (MSRP 15,000 yen tax included), which went on sale on 12/2/2004 and includes such unique functionality as double screens, touch screens, microphone input, and wireless communication (via local network and WiFi), was able to gain the support of gamers as well as many women and seniors who are new to gaming, allowing it to achieve sales figures (actual number of sales from retailers to customers) of over 5,000,000 units in the 13 months its release, making it the fastest selling console in Japan. It is expected that sales will have reached 5,700,000 units by the end of 2005.
Advances in reducing its size and weight allow the "Nintendo DS Lite" to achieve a higher level of portability wile retaining all of the unique functionality of the original. In addition, this high-grade machine now includes a brighter screen that allows for four brightness settings, (The name "Lite" was selected for its dual meaning of "light-weight" and "bright").
With the release of the upscale "Nintendo DS Lite", not only does Nintendo continue in its tradition of creating charming games that can be enjoyed regardless of gender, age, or gaming experience, it realizes an overwhelming adoption of its system, affirming its importance in the handheld market.
Product Name: Nintendo DS Lite On Sale: 3/2/2006 MSRP: 16,800 yen (approx. $150 with tax) Size: Width 133.0 mm * Length 73.9 mm * Thickness 21.5 mm (previous model: 148.7 mm * Length 84.7 mm * Thickness 28.9 mm) Weight 218 grams (previous model: 275 grams)
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Press Release 1/26/2006 Nintendo
Upscale Nintendo DS Model Debut
Nintendo DS Lite
On Sale March 2nd
Nintendo Co.,Ltd. (Kyoto, JAPAN; President Satoru Iwata) announced that it will begin sales of the "Nintendo DS Lite", an upscale model of the "Nintendo DS" portable gaming system on March 2nd of this year.
The "Nintendo DS" (MSRP 15,000 yen tax included), which went on sale on 12/2/2004 and includes such unique functionality as double screens, touch screens, microphone input, and wireless communication (via local network and WiFi), was able to gain the support of gamers as well as many women and seniors who are new to gaming, allowing it to achieve sales figures (actual number of sales from retailers to customers) of over 5,000,000 units in the 13 months its release, making it the fastest selling console in Japan. It is expected that sales will have reached 5,700,000 units by the end of 2005.
Advances in reducing its size and weight allow the "Nintendo DS Lite" to achieve a higher level of portability wile retaining all of the unique functionality of the original. In addition, this high-grade machine now includes a brighter screen that allows for four brightness settings, (The name "Lite" was selected for its dual meaning of "light-weight" and "bright").
With the release of the upscale "Nintendo DS Lite", not only does Nintendo continue in its tradition of creating charming games that can be enjoyed regardless of gender, age, or gaming experience, it realizes an overwhelming adoption of its system, affirming its importance in the handheld market.
Product Name: Nintendo DS Lite
On Sale: 3/2/2006
MSRP: 16,800 yen (approx. $150 with tax)
Size: Width 133.0 mm * Length 73.9 mm * Thickness 21.5 mm (previous model: 148.7 mm * Length 84.7 mm * Thickness 28.9 mm)
Weight 218 grams (previous model: 275 grams)